The lazy teardrops fall,
From my swiftly blinking eyes,
I hear my restless heart beating,
Over my stammering sighs.
How could you love me then,
When you knew it was unfair,
When you would need me most,
I just might not be there.
I'm sorry for being my psychic-self,
My inability to understand,
You'll find more graceful lovers,
But how I wish I could hold your hand.
I do not deserve you - I know,
I realize I'm insane,
But I have this feeling I cannot express,
This... love perhaps I cannot explain.
I break into animal-like laughter,
As I remember that adorable smile on your face,
My weird childish mannerisms,
Could have never been a match for your grace.
I stare into your photograph,
Then press it to my heart,
As if protecting your thoughts,
I'll never let them depart.
Folding into myself, in a corner,
I cling on to your memories,
You're mine, when I close my eyes,
And here - we're together in peace.
9 comments:
this is the best poem u ever wrote
im speechless .....i mean its awesome.......
great work
beautiful!
@Devika .... thanks re .... precious comment ... i thought you could like at ...
@ sanz ... thanks ...
beautiful is a big word ... :)
there is a lot of grace which u talk about - so i refer im not being talked about
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How could you love me then,
When you knew it was unfair,
When you would need me most,
I just might not be there.
if this is derived from ny sort of personal experience , i must tell u ,totally unwarranted
and we r too young
we need to grow
speaks the key .......
great work dude
I won't say this caught me.
This is not a "gripping" read, not at all a "thrilling" read.
This, sucker, is the most "natural", "realized", and the most "causal" kind of read.
You sit. You go through it. You are very naturally flowing with it all along. You relate. You take sense from it. Every word makes its mark. Perhaps more than that.
It suffices to say that I am satisfied.
And undoubtedly, this is the best of whatever you ever posted: as Devika mentioned.
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But all this applies to the reader, if he knows Sid. And knows him well. Otherwise, you will sit, read, relate, feel and relax. But you won't flow. However, I happen to be one of the people who know. And knowers always suck more and better.
P.S.: Satisfying, as I said.
P.P.S.: There is no bigger word than that. Not even "beautiful".
:P
I always draw for my personal emotions a lot... yes ... but I add concepts and exaggeration .... unconsciously even .... and perhaps then I think anybody else who'll read it will see only what I want to show .... I don't know .. I kind of gives me some kind of satisfaction ..... that is why I was always interested in poetry perhaps ... it is easier to "not communicate" the things in this form ...
Especially for the things on my blog...
@Anant : Yeah ... satisfying is a big big word agreed :P
PS: Also After I'd written the poem i was searching for the pic on the net for this ... and I found some "Aalekh"'s photo from a serial called Bidaai ... and that is the photo actually ... XD!!!!!!!!!!
ROFL>..
** hey bhagwaan IIT mein theek rank aa jaaye
hey bhagwaan IIT mein theek rank aa jaaye
hey bhagwaan IIT mein theek rank aa jaaye.... **
why did my comment go unappreciated ??
why has anant started commenting here ??? and now that he , should i stop ??
oh god why does he suck so much ?? (meant for anant)
also
bhagwan , when did u get so desperate for worldly qualifications ??
arre .... mera last comment was in appreciation of your comment only na ....
I have some weird feelings ... and all of them are warranted .. i don't go against them ... :)
and you think its great work .. waah yaar ... **khush hota hai** ...
Anant ... ya I was drunk last to lasr night aur us nashe mein maine anant ko bata diya ki i'd written a poem ...
Ya ... me getting desperate for worldly qualifications ... kyonki maa-baap ke shabdon ke baan mein aur naheen sahan kar paaoonga .... XD!!! ...
U WERE DRUNK ??AS IN DARU ??
TUM KAB SE PEENE LAGE?
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